If you tend to put key information late in the sentence, you may lose your reader.
Move the following highlighted words to earlier in the sentence to make it flow more smoothly:
1.The most urgent need following the April earthquake and the recent flooding in the western and northern regions is shelter.
2. In late April and early May, the northern, north-eastern, central and western regions were affected by floods.
3. Targeted assassinations against civilians and government officials in the south, south-east, north and central regions persisted.
Answer key
- Shelter is the most urgent need following the April earthquake and the recent flooding in the western and northern regions.
- In late April and early May, floods affected the northern, north-eastern, central and western regions.
- Targeted assassinations persisted against civilians and government officials in the south, south-east, north and central regions.
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Author: Carol Waites
Presentation/editing by Christina O’Shaughnessy
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